I loved this! The characters are animated so well and you paste this beautiful piece together absolutely magnificently. Though, I could be talking out of emotion, since I shifted through some other stories and poetry that weren't as good as this from others.

Some of the things I really liked was the premise behind all of this, I also love the rambling bit about wondering if you would find God in Sea. That was also beautifully thrown in and it really dove me deep into the story.

One thing that I wouldn't mention is that your grammar was so close! So close! Some words should be proofread a little bit. A few instances there was a "don't" but really there should've been a "doesn't."

Also, don't be afraid of conjunctions! I have, he had, I would, I have been. It renders the flow that you've created completely useless. A person doesn't talk like that, they abbreviated and conjoining words into a flow that can be traced over with ease.

I cannot wait to read more! You just need to work on your grammar, it's seriously so close!